9.8.10

Rewrites + Tease + Music

I am STILL trying.

I refuse to give up on this novel, even though it is being really really REALLY impossible. There is just so much to do. I have to fix plot holes, tighten up character arcs, make Kendall more real and not the whiny baby she was in the first draft. I mean, as I was reading over the first draft, I began to realize that Kendall wasn't the way I pictured her. The way I wanted her to be.

So character makeovers are at the TOP of the list.

Damn - by the time I finish this novel, I mean REALLY finish it. I'm going to be an old lady. Hopefully that's not the case, but maybe JUST maybe I'll finish this first draft before the year is over.

Keep your fingers crossed for me. :D

Okay, since I missed Teaser Tuesday last week, I'm going to post my teaser early because I have to go to work tomorrow and I won't have time to post until I get home from work.

This is the NEWEST beginning of Lost & Found. At first, I loved it, then I hated it, then I loved it, and you get the picture. So before I push the backspace button I'm going to let you guys read it, and tell me if it: A) Hooked you B) Made sense and C) Read well.

Any thoughts will be greatly appreciated. And I will try to get to everyone's teasers. Ever since I started working, things have been really hectic, but this is my last week at my summer job, so next Tuesday, I will definitely be able to get to more teasers.
Ooh and sense it is technically Music Monday here is a song from the Lost & Found soundtrack that I absolutely adore.

********** SNIP *********




Thanks for reading and enjoy the rest of your Monday. :D

7 comments:

  1. Loved this line: My footprints were embedded in the dirt road, so all I had to do was follow them back to the brick house that sat below the hill, nestled between a few naked trees and a yellow house that was it's complete opposite: quiet, forlorn, empty.

    This is a great start...my only question is: Is this how it's supposed to be formatted? It kind of throws me off a little as I read it what with each sentence seeming to be its own paragraph. But that's just my opinion.

    Good luck with the revisions :)

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  2. A) Yes, definitely hooked me!
    B) As far as I can tell? I wasn't confused about anything :)
    C) Also yes! Especially the "blue-jean eyes" line, loved that. Great descriptions :)

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  3. Yes, definitely intriguing! She doesn't sound whiny, just sort of melancholy. And I loved the language in this, it was lovely!

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  4. Definitely hooked me, in a quieter sneakier way than a lot of beginnings that drop you in the middle of action.

    I liked that you developed her sense of ambivalence, she seems genuinely torn about what is the right (or easier) course of action.

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  5. It's definitely hooky, it made sense, and it read well. Although I did wonder the same thing as the other Karla did (we Karla with a K's think so much alike! hehe).

    Awesome opening! Good luck with finishing it soon! *crosses fingers* :D

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  6. Yes to all three :D As has been said, it's hooky, but not in a LOOKEXPLOSIONS! sort of way, which I personally prefer. I'd read on.

    Good luck, and I admire your determination :D

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  7. Yes to all three.

    I've done character makeovers before. They are possible, as are the other things on your list. So keep trying. :)

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