tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post4314300827563295157..comments2015-06-17T18:01:00.398-07:00Comments on Love Letters to Forever: Teaser TuesdayRaven Mhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03538947519732493635noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-64856868633632269432010-02-09T15:40:50.045-08:002010-02-09T15:40:50.045-08:00I LOVE LOVE LOVE the way you started this. There i...I LOVE LOVE LOVE the way you started this. There is humor engraved in this, but still I'm wondering what's she going to do to old Metal Mouth?It sounds like a promising WIP. GAH! I Love everything you write!DrunkenLilacshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16170155991218831990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-88821906687220396342010-02-09T14:47:39.832-08:002010-02-09T14:47:39.832-08:00Great teaser, Ely! This sounds like a really cool ...Great teaser, Ely! This sounds like a really cool WiP!Caitlin R. O'Connellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10783453696462112780noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-49724411729464579472010-02-09T10:39:59.465-08:002010-02-09T10:39:59.465-08:00Interesting opening. I would suggest cutting the ...Interesting opening. I would suggest cutting the first paragraph and starting with "I had walked into that bar looking for trouble, and, as always, it found me," but that's just my 2 cents : ))Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-76524789489652469492010-02-09T09:29:57.555-08:002010-02-09T09:29:57.555-08:00Interesting..I totally want to know what she's...Interesting..I totally want to know what she's doing there! And love the plunging neckline line, too! Great attention to detail as well!houndrathttp://www.houndrat.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-20090404042782435102010-02-09T09:12:40.341-08:002010-02-09T09:12:40.341-08:00Really nice details. Loved the bit about the neckl...Really nice details. Loved the bit about the neckline and especially liked "People with metal in their mouth usually had stinky breath."Kathleenhttp://stopdropandplot.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-63097075507626735032010-02-09T09:08:33.249-08:002010-02-09T09:08:33.249-08:00Lol! Old metal mouth. Your MC is so mean, describi...Lol! Old metal mouth. Your MC is so mean, describing the poor man like that. And it's well written too. Though u're right about the title, Ashes ashes, sounded a bit weird. You could take out one ashes, i supposeGlen Akinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09647296775230237162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-74320673897887285532010-02-09T08:19:06.794-08:002010-02-09T08:19:06.794-08:00Great snippet. I'm definitely interested abou...Great snippet. I'm definitely interested about why she went to that bar on a school night!Jill Wheelerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15059527254551768150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-68727530348975800432010-02-09T07:55:27.421-08:002010-02-09T07:55:27.421-08:00This is extremely well written. Flows so well, the...This is extremely well written. Flows so well, the ending actually hit me *wonders if Ely will post a summary*Bidishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382938442171208326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-63092885538864782592010-02-09T07:30:29.351-08:002010-02-09T07:30:29.351-08:00"I was wearing make-up and a dress with a plu..."I was wearing make-up and a dress with a plunging neckline that would have my mother praying for days, but I didn't look old enough to drink." <-- love that. Mostly the part about her mother praying for days-- very clever. :-)Veronica Rothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04728002051255414818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-46023892244666136092010-02-09T07:02:20.420-08:002010-02-09T07:02:20.420-08:00I really like this! You're very talented...the...I really like this! You're very talented...the way you describe your characters is both effortless and flawless...well done! :)Melissa (i swim for oceans)https://www.blogger.com/profile/06840790603713851746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-72635906403198670762010-02-09T06:59:11.740-08:002010-02-09T06:59:11.740-08:00ha! metal mouth! Loved it.ha! metal mouth! Loved it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-80309171522020947622010-02-09T06:18:35.557-08:002010-02-09T06:18:35.557-08:00This comment has been removed by the author.bclement412https://www.blogger.com/profile/05104255054978064868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-1277779596017806932010-02-09T06:18:25.501-08:002010-02-09T06:18:25.501-08:00Metal Mouth.
Teehee. This WIP sounds really inter...Metal Mouth.<br /><br />Teehee. This WIP sounds really interesting.bclement412https://www.blogger.com/profile/05104255054978064868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2387024755217606129.post-47005314324229898222010-02-09T06:17:41.936-08:002010-02-09T06:17:41.936-08:00old metal mouth! i love that! nice snip.old metal mouth! i love that! nice snip.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13612218172442721987noreply@blogger.com